On essay number one the structure of the essay is nice and precise. The essay should have been more focused on the author's rhetoric and literary devices rather than personal opinion though.
The essay on Old Leisure has a clear thesis that is present through all the body paragraphs (that it is ultimately a question of technology available, and not the character of the people of the time). However, it seems like George Eliot somewhat predicted the argument in her discussion of the "steam engine". The problem is inherent to innovation, not the people. That said, the essay clearly presented a standpoint and supported it.
I would probably agree on Will Veroski in that the prompt asked you to argue from Elliot's point of view rather than provide anecdotal evidence. Still a decent essay though.
On essay number one the structure of the essay is nice and precise. The essay should have been more focused on the author's rhetoric and literary devices rather than personal opinion though.
ReplyDeleteThe essay on Old Leisure has a clear thesis that is present through all the body paragraphs (that it is ultimately a question of technology available, and not the character of the people of the time). However, it seems like George Eliot somewhat predicted the argument in her discussion of the "steam engine". The problem is inherent to innovation, not the people. That said, the essay clearly presented a standpoint and supported it.
ReplyDeleteI would probably agree on Will Veroski in that the prompt asked you to argue from Elliot's point of view rather than provide anecdotal evidence. Still a decent essay though.
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